VIOLIN-MY BEST DREAM
EVER
It is one of my dreams to play violin but I’ve never had the
chance to learn it. But when I hear a voice belonging to violin,I become really
happy and I feel as if I’m playing it. So I wanted to take the subject of ‘violin’
to express my feelings about it. Also, the shape of it and the style of playing
it are very effective for me. When I see someone playing a violin I would always
want to be that person. I think that It’s a privilege to know how to play it. That’s
because It a big challenge to learn and
play it perfectly.
In this video , the girl tries to teach how to play a violin
and she starts from the styles of sitting and holding the violin. That really
affected me because in order to play it perfectly, one needs to stay perfectly
from the beginning. So,one cannot stay the way s/he would like if s/he wants to
play it flawlessly. That reflected me how the violin shapes people J
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Dear Esra,
Firstly, I want to say that you really like violin because I know you tried to find a violin course in previous days I hope you would find one Moreover, I liked reading your journal. But there are some mistakes I have mentioned above. You are very good in terms of punctuation and language. However, you should be careful about conjunctions. Congratulations